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A slight chill runs through you
when the first drop hits your hand.
A laugh builds up inside of you
as the rain starts pouring down.

When the first drop hits your hand
you stare in wonder at the sky.
As the rain starts pouring down
you reach down to touch the ground.

You stare in wonder at the sky
as the rain falls steadily.
You reach down to touch the ground
and feel the water running through your fingers.

As the rain falls steadily
you lay in the rushing stream
and feel the water running through your fingers
as the water washes over you.

You lay in the rushing stream,
a laugh builds up inside of you.
As the water rushes over you,
a slight chill runs through you.
:iconyellowneoy:
I had to write three poems for school, and yeah, this is one of them... it had to be like that, where the lines are repeated in a certain way, i forgot what it was called though... but whatever.... i wrote it after i played in the rain with my friend, about a week ago i think...
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:iconlonelycanary228:
Rather hypnotic.

I could definitely envision rain falling on me - the way it looks, feels, smells, and sounds - while reading this.
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:iconmoontress124:
PS i still loooove this
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:iconmoontress124:
yaargy shmaargy it still says putting in he first line!!! fix it, woman! fix iiiiit!!!
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:iconyellowneoy:
wait whaaaat needs to be fixed?? you confuses me...
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:iconmoontress124:
it still says putting instead of pouring!
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:iconyellowneoy:
not anymore it doesnt :D
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:iconmoontress124:
joy! my annoying grammaticalness has been quelled!

hehehehe. i said QUELLED!
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